Feedback: Summary and Implications

So in class we received feedback on our first draft as seen below:

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Feedback we received

The Comic’s drawing style is good and applying computer touch up is not necessary – So one feedback item we received was that the way in which our comic is drawn using stick figures and hand drawn images is a a good format and doesn’t require change. However this feedback was tempered with a recommendation that we should work on coloring in our comic so as to draw attention and increase its appeal.

Adding a reason WHY to do the things the comic says is imperative to capture the intended audience’s actual dedication to changing their actions – To incorporate this feedback we realized we would need to actually change our final draft of the comic in some key ways from our first draft. Modifications we are looking to add are, some panels representing the bad things that can happen if the student does not follow the advice. Perhaps an expansion on the idea of failure, a failure on the part of the student should they not attempt to preserve food waste.

Our comic has to much dialogue causing it to be hard to read easily – This problem is especially noticeable in the last page so we are looking to make an overhaul that will cut down on the dialogue while still getting the key points across to the audience, in tandem with this although the text on page 2 however the dialogue may seem long but the key is that the point the dialogue reinforces is well demonstrated by the images on each of the four panels.

We want to hear from you!!!

Is there any feedback you want to give us that you didn’t get a chance to in class or that you thought of since?

Do you like our changes or should we be modifying our modifications?

Anything else that you think could be of interest for this project to produce the best final product to change sustainability at WPI?